Part one: y I wanna b a doc Medical profession is a very respectable and honored field of expertise, the passion that derives me to it comes from various life experiences. Wht things helped me decide that I wanted to b a doc I come frm a third world country and iv seen people die due to lack of docs – – Grandfather died due to lack of proper treatment and medication I hv seen physicians diagnose and help cure their patients and this whole act interests me a lot
My interest in the field of chemistry and biology has added to my decision in proceeding into the medical field (eg: in earlier experiences in class I had an opportunity to dissect a human body and its parts tendon and muscles.. I learnt a lot frm that experience and therefore wanted to proceed in the medical field. I was excited and interested in learning more about it After wrk whn I come home I would feel moral satisfaction that iv done something good for the man kind. Some questions you may want to consider while drafting this essay are: Why have you selected the field of medicine?
What motivates you to learn more about medicine? What do you want medical schools to know about you that hasn’t been disclosed in another section of the application? In addition, you may wish to include information such as: Special hardships, challenges or obstacles that may have influenced your educational pursuits. The special hardships, or challenges or obstacles would be like my english as second langauge, no mentor, or chose wrong major in the beginning. Three parts of the essay ?? First part is Why have you selected the field of medicine? THIS IS THE REASON I WANNA BE a DOC………………. 1. espectable and honored field of expertise 2. I am interested to know about human body 3. When it was time for me to decide what career I will proceed, before I came to college I gave a real good thought about all the careers option. Finally I came up with the idea of becoming a doctor because I am a people person and I love to make people feel better from whatever disease they have. 4. Moral satisfaction. Like after 5. I shadowed couple physician. I have seen them how they diagnosis the disease and saw them doing procedure that make me decide that I can do that too because this is what something I wanna do too.
Example: when a doc told a patient and his family to amputee one leg because of gangrene to reduce the pain. I have seen him how to say and control the situations. 6. Team work.. I have work in different places and class projects. I get along with teammate and get good result end of it. 7. Leadership skills work different places. Always trying to solve problems if there is any ?? What motivate to you become a doctor (something that make me decide why do I wanna be a doc) 1. my brother is doctor. I have seen him going through the medical school. I have seen how medical college changes a person.
He became more responsible and effectual and able human being and an integral part of your community(this underline part I got from online) 2. when I was lil I saw my grandfather died in front of me because of proper treatment and incorrect diagnosis. Which is make me from inside to be a doctor and treat people correctly so no one can die without diagnosis (cheesy or corny? ) 3. Another one was from 3rd world country. I have seen so many people died without proper treatment or lack of doctor(kinda similar to last one but i think we can that two scenario together. ) ?
The 3rd part would be the Special hardships, challenges or obstacles that may have influenced your educational pursuits In this part I can include such as: 2. English is my second language…so I had really tough time to keep good grades and sometimes this is the reason I have got bad grade in couple subjects. 3. Chose a wrong major beginning of the college year 4. To be successful in a life, a mentor is really really important , but I did not have mentor to tell me what college to go or etcccc. 5. I don’t think I should put that or not…. but as I had to pay my own school fees and boarding… I had to work …it hamper my study time!!!! may be or may be not should include) I. Some Words on Structure Structure refers to how you choose to present the information in your personal statement. Good structure will make your piece flow, and enhance the reader’s ability to understand what you are trying to get across. Some people can write well without thinking too much about structure. They naturally organize their information to be seamless, transitioning well between points and making their comments relevant to a theme. Most people, however, need to work at it a little more.
Here are some very basic tips on how to make sure your personal statement has good structure. Choose a FOCUS What is it? Focus refers to the main point of your statement. Sometimes it is called a theme. Most of what you say in your statement will contribute to supporting your focus. In the very broadest sense, the focus of all medical school personal statements is “Why I Should Be Accepted to Medical School,”. However, you need to choose something a little more subtle and personal to make a positive impression. Your focus should entail a value or an observation that has shaped you as a person.
Most of the time a focus is an abstract quality: the desire to help others, the importance of individual contribution, the drive to unite science and compassion. How to choose it. Because of the abstract nature of focus, it can seem like a daunting task to choose one for your personal statement. Instead of sitting down and trying to come up with abstraction that you think defines you, it is much easier to come up with a list of experiences that have had an impact on your life. You can then examine the experiences to see what, exactly, about them made them important. This will often yield a good focus. Here are some tips to onsider when choosing an experience to evaluate for a focus: * It should be unique. It does not have to be life shattering, but you should be able to write about it with conviction, enthusiasm and authority. * It should be an experience you feel some passion for. You must be able to support it as a “turning point” in your life. Ask yourself, “How did I change as a result of this experience? ” For example, did it give you a new perspective or understanding, did it give you a new direction in life, or help you come to an important realization? * Don’t limit yourself to thinking of experiences that can translate well into the moral of ” . . and that’s why I want to be a doctor. ” Choose something that you feel is truly representative of you, and something that you feel you can use to transition to other relevant aspects of your life. Otherwise, your statement may come off sounding staged or strained. * It should be sustainable throughout your statement. In other words it has to have enough depth and flexibility to carry you through your statement while avoiding repetition. The details of the event should afford you opportunity to talk about related experiences that you want the people who are considering your for an interview to know.
Can you give me an example? Perhaps am experience that impacted you was the time you were thrown from your horse and dislocated your hip on the day before an important riding competition. It was a pivotal experience because it was the first time you were a patient with a serious injury, and because it was the biggest disappointment of your life. While in the hospital, your roommate was a woman who had just had both of her legs amputated due to diabetes. One possible focus that could be derived from this experience is how you learned how to put the elements you your life in perspective.
This is a lesson that might have helped you in ensuing experiences, and you could outline ways that it could help you during medical school, or as a doctor. There are also many ways to use the experience to talk about other issues involved in becoming a doctor. You could talk about how you felt as a patient, and the things about your treatment that you appreciated. Perhaps your doctors were attentive to your deep disappointment as well as to your injury. You could talk about how you used the time away from riding to develop an interest in sports medicine, or volunteering, or riding instruction, or psychology The ossibilities of a well-chosen experience are limitless. As long as the experience was memorable and formed you in some way, it is a good candidate for the production of focus. Create a FRAME for your FOCUS: What is it? When most people think of frames, they think of the structure around a picture, or the structure that holds something up-like a skeleton or building frame. That is a pretty accurate way to think about the frame in writing, too. A frame will give your statement a shape. It will provide a concrete way for you to introduce and talk about your focus.
Most of the time, if you’ve come up with a good experience from which to draw a focus, you can use details of the same experience for your frame. While the focus is often an abstract idea, the frame consists of concrete details-places, people, action It provides a means for anchoring your focus by setting a scene. Many people think of the frame as a story, and in a lot of ways it is. In a personal statement, it usually consists of an anecdote that is introduced at the beginning of your statement and is brought to some sort of closure at the end.
Can you give me an example? Keeping with the experience we used to derive a focus, here is an example of how frame might function to open a personal statement: Nothing was more important to me on that warm morning in June than the upcoming competition. I’d been riding horses since I was six, and tomorrow I’d be riding the most difficult jump course of my life. I’d come out early to practice, and although it was sunny, there was still dew in the grass. The first time around the course I heard my horse’s hooves click against the top bar of barriers twice.
Determined to have a perfect sweep, I sent her into the course a second time without stopping for a breather. My impatience cost me dearly. As my horse gathered herself to clear the third and largest fence of the course, I felt her falter and leaned forward to encourage her. My last minute adjustment didn’t help. The barrier caught her at the knees and we crashed down together. Of course, you don’t want to use up too much of your limited space just setting a scene. Make sure your frame serves multiple purposes: * It introduces the occasion of the focus * It introduces you It is creative enough to spark interest in the rest of your statement By framing the statement with an anecdote, you provide your audience with immediate access to some aspect of your past, your character, and your personality. Also, you give them incentive to read on to find our what happens next. Make sure you return, even if it is only in a cursory way, to the frame at the end of the statement. Often, this is a good opportunity to summarize the important points of your statement and tie them together into a concluding observation. What is a concluding observation?
The concluding observation is a restatement of your focus, but in a way that shows how it has evolved over time from a lesson that you learned as a result of a specific event into a bit of wisdom that you’ve found useful to apply to other situations in your life–and that will continue to serve you in medical school and as a doctor. Here is how the frame and concluding observation might function at the end of a statement: I’m sometimes a bit ashamed when I think that I had to dislocate my hip in order to learn that my approach to life was limiting my horizons.
The first day that I returned to the saddle I was too sore to do more than ride very slowly through the fields near the stables. I remember that it was be best ride of my life, and to this day I only ride my horse for pleasure, not competition. To be honest, it’s because I haven’t had the time! My accident forced me away from a consuming passion and gave me the opportunity to discover other treasures in my life, treasures that to this day I find more rewarding than competitive riding. The foremost of those pleasures has been working at the summer camps for children who have lost arms and legs to amputation.
I want to continue to broaden myself in medical school and beyond so that I might encounter yet more treasures along the path to becoming a pediatric surgeon. Create Strong TRANSITIONS Transitions refer to the language you use to move from one idea to the next. Most of the time transitions are accompanied by a paragraph break. You should never assume, however, that a paragraph break is enough of an indication that you are leaving one idea behind and moving on to another. One way to check for clear transitions is to make sure the first sentence of every paragraph is somehow related to the last sentence in the previous paragraph.
Even when you need to shift gears pretty drastically, you should find a way to create a “bridge” between your ideas. If you have chosen a strong focus and frame, your transitions will come much easier. This is because you can use your frame and focus as a sort of hub that is the origin of each new idea that you choose to explore in your statement. In addition to making sure that you transition well between your ideas, you should also make sure that your ideas are presented in a logical order that your reader can identify and follow. Many students choose to use chronological order.
You might choose to order things from most to least important, or use categorize your ideas (e. g. academics, volunteer experience, work experience, etc. ) Whatever order you choose, be faithful to it WHY I WANT TO BE A DOCTOR Medical profession is a profession of respect, care and humanity. It is not just another trade, but is a field of expertise. This expertise comes by virtue of years of dedicated studies, and is enhanced by years of practice with equal dedication and continued education through studies and experience. This is not just my opinion, but an accepted fact over the whole world.
Medicine is one of the noblest professions. A doctor is a professional who is trained to, and uses his training not only to treat his patients from their physical and sentimental hardships, but also becomes instrumental in saving invaluable human lives. With his knowledge, which he gains by his education and practice, he helps relieve his patients from their sufferings. A doctor is a person who is looked at with respect and with honor. People like to seek his advice because they are assured here of proper and healthy guidance. It is not that the other professions are any less honorable.
All the professionals help the community in their own different ways to make day to day life better and enhanced. However, a doctor is always looked at as the person who relieves others from their physical and mental hardship. People look at the doctor as a person to whom they go with great hopes. They approach a doctor when they have lost all hopes, and their physical and mental conditions make them partially or completely helpless. In my country we have a red chain in the railway train carriage. There is a sign below this chain saying, “Pull in case of emergency”.
In case of emergency you pull this chain, and the train immediately stops. By stopping the train some grave emergencies could be prevented and avoided. A doctor to most public is like this “Red Emergency Chain. They pull this chain when they start thinking that there is nothing else left to save themselves from their miseries. The doctor listens to their hardships, analyzes the symptoms, soothes `them, makes him comfortable, assures them that everything would be fine with them, prescribes treatment, and makes sure that the patient is completely relieved of the feeling of misery before he leaves chambers.
A doctor would always treat his patients ethically and with equality. He also believes in good teamwork. He would not be afraid or ashamed of informing his patient that he is adequately qualified to diagnose or treat patients only within his area of expertise. In case he feels that the symptoms of the patient are not within parameters of his area of expertise, he would not feel ashamed of recommending the patient of a second opinion, or an expert opinion. He would also ascertain his findings with all necessary tests and analysis before he prescribes any treatment to his patient.
He keeps himself up-to-date with state of the art developments in the medicines and other health related information. Right from my young age I was always impressed in the manner the doctors were respected in the society. Whenever somebody is sick in the family, other family members would immediately seek help of the doctor. They would either take the patient to the dispensary or hospital, or would request the doctor for a house visit if the patient is not fit to be transferred to the hospital. I would like to make one thing clear before I proceed further.
I am from a third world country. In our part of the world, transferring a patient to hospital by ambulance is very rare. The patient is taken to dispensary or hospital by relatives, or the doctor makes a house visit if patient is unable to visit the dispensary or hospital. In either case, I was always awed at the manner in which the doctor carries respect for his visitors, the manner in which he would gather information about the ailment, the manner in which he would analyze the information and the manner in which he would prescribe treatment. And that is not all.
The doctor would insist on a repeat visit to make sure that the patient is reacting properly and positively to the treatment. He would continue monitoring the condition of the patient till he is assured that the ailment is completely cured. I was always impressed by his expertise and professionalism. This impression became much firmer when I was about ten years of age. My grandmother became seriously ill. I was my grandmother`s favorite grandson. I was always with her, and I was the most concerned about her health in our household. Well, as usual we requested our family doctor for a house visit.
The family doctor immediately came for the visit. He requested for some tests and further examinations. He arranged for all these initial tests and examinations from home. Upon examining results of these tests he felt that the case was beyond his expertise. So he frankly referred her case to another specialist. The specialist suggested that my grandmother be shifted to a specialty hospital. Being a favorite grandson of a favorite grandmother, I had to be with her all the time. I was so concerned about her wellbeing that I was insisting that other elders in the family keep me informed about all developments regards her health.
My grandmother was in the hospital for almost two months. During these two months I was constantly watching the humanity and kindness with which the doctors and their staff behaved with my grandmother and other members of the family. I was very much impressed by their punctuality, their cleanliness, their professionalism and their attitude towards the patient and her family. I was very much impressed by the manner in which the whole team of doctors and their staff would work like a clock-work, and the manner in which the doctor would lead his team to perfection.
Even though I was so young, the doctors and hospital staff would always behave with me with equal respect, and answer all my questions in the manner that I would be satisfied. I noticed that the doctors worked with great teamwork. During the normal daily visit they would note the diagnosis, readings and treatments in their log. They would regularly review progress and developments with their staff and other members of their medical team. In case of some unexpected observations, they would immediately recommend review and consultation by another specialist.
The whole team would work in unison in order that the best treatment is available for the patient. They also demonstrated excellent leadership quality to guide their medical staff through the procedures to be follows for treatment. I noticed that during his regular round the doctor would patiently listen to the report from his staff, review the observations and reading they had noted during the day, and then discuss all these details before prescribing further treatment during the following day. In case of any expected development he would immediately instruct the nurse on duty to recommend additional tests or a pecial review by another specialist. The doctor was available round-the-clock for emergencies. During the early days in the hospital, when my grandmother’s case was more serious, the doctor would visit he more often than once in a day, and sometimes he visited her in the middle of the night when the nurse on duty called him for review. I observed that his attitude was the same for all his patients in the hospital. During this time in the hospital there were also couple of patients did not respond properly to the treatment, and unfortunately passed out.
At these times I felt that the doctors treating these patients were equally grief-stricken as the near and dear family of the diseased patient, if not more. I could feel the sorrow of the doctors and other medical staff. I could feel that their belief was that they could not treat the patient and save a human life. They felt defeated. They did not say sorry to the patient’s family, and walked away, but remained with the family to share their grief and sorrow. They did not have tears in their eyes like the family members, but made themselves much stronger to console the relatives of the diseased.
The whole episode in a way changed my perspective towards life. In the hospital I experienced the pain and troubles my grandmother was going through. At the same time I could also see the pains through what the other patients were going through. The hospital was run by a charitable trust. Well-to-do patients were being charged reasonable fees, and on the other hand poor and needy patients were provided service from the charity. This procedure had made the hospital a very famous. The doctors and staff of the hospital were highly trained in their respective fields.
Majority of the doctors working in the hospital were working on honorary basis, donating their time and experience for the noble cause of serving the community. However, for me, this gave me a chance to have a deep insight of the pain and agony experienced by the patients, rich and poor, old and young, and of all genders. I noticed that the same diseases could happen to any person irrespective of their class or creed, and I could see that the doctors would get equal satisfaction when they treated any of the patients. This feeling of satisfaction made me feel that I must also serve the community in similar manner.
I was so much impressed by all this that when my grandmother was being discharged from the hospital, and the doctor and his team came to carry out their final checkup; I declared there and then that I would also like to become a doctor so that I can treat my patients with the same care and dedication. Of course, looking at my age at that time, everybody in the room had a great laugh. Irrespective of all that my mind was made up for this noble profession. Once I had made up my mind, I started seriously working towards my goal. I started observing and studying the lives of medical personnel.
In my quest my mentor and guide was our family doctor. His dispensary was quite close to our residence. Whenever I had some time, I would request him if I could hang around his chambers. On his part, he also would whole heartedly encourage me in my quest. One very important thing I learned from the beginning that a doctor has no defined working hours, holidays, weekends or vacation. Sickness does not wait for normal working hours or working days. The doctor would be called for consultation at any time of day or night, and he also would not hesitate to visit his patients at any odd times.
His chambers would be a busy place during the normal working hours, and he was always on stand-by for any house calls or emergencies. I was so very much impressed to see that there was no sign of complaint on his face or attitude for this hard work. On the contrary, he would show great signs of satisfaction when he would relieve some patient from physical and mental ailments. Sometimes I would ask him about what made him going with his so strenuous schedule, and he would just smile and say that the profession was his first and last choice, and the his patients health and wellness would be his only goal.
Even though he used to charge reasonable consultation fees from his regular patients, I also noticed that he would not charge any fees from several needy patients. He also used to offer his services in several charitable organizations where he would provide free consultation to poor and needy patients. All this made him highly respected in the community. As I was getting to age, he would allow me to attend when he is discussing some difficult case with other doctors or specialists. He would also not feel bad if I ask some questions about their discussions. On the contrary, they would encourage me to understand the discussion.
My doctor mentor made it very clear to me that getting into medical profession is not an easy task. That would require concentrating into some specific fields of studies and mastering those subjects. At that age he stressed on me that I must concentrate with my studies in English, mathematics and science. In our country English is normally taught as a third language after regional language and national language. However, my mentor would stress on me that if I want to pursue my studies in medicine, I must be proficient in English. At the same time math and science are the backbones for medical studies.
In the beginning I was thinking that all these studies would take up most of my time, and would not leave me any time for play and other enjoyment. With very little work I could easily work out a balance between my studies and extracurricular activities. This balance made me organizing my available schedule to the best of my abilities. I was able to complete my studies in time, complete my regular extracurricular activities and also spare some time to help at the clinic. Another thing that happened during that time was that my elder brother got admission into medical school.
After he was admitted in the medical school, I could observe some great changes in his behavior and attitude. He started becoming much more sincere in his studies. He started behaving more affectionately with other family members and friends. He would take more active part in other social activities. He started networking with not only his co-students, but also with several other people in the community. I could notice that he started becoming more and more responsible to the community. Rather than behaving with ego because he was a medical student, he started becoming more humble to other members of the community.
Ego was completely extinct from his behavior. I could clearly notice that he felt more and more responsible towards the community. All this made him gaining more and more confidence in himself. I could compare this confidence very clearly with my doctor mentor. By very little thinking I could relate this confidence to their ability, dedication and intentions to relieve their patients from their miseries. In case of practicing doctor, the satisfaction was that he is already practicing this in daily life, whereas in case of my brother the satisfaction to him was that he is being trained in the same field.
In either case the goal was to be helpful to the community, the first one was practicing it in his daily work, and the other was working towards it. I was becoming more and more impatient as to when I would be able to reach any of these stages. Finally the day came when I was required to select my major for studies. Since I had worked very hard in my studies, I did not have any hurdles in selection of the major due to inadequate grades. My grades would qualify me for any major. Several proposals came to me for selection. Some of them proposed ery lucrative and easy lifestyle, whereas others were may be less in returns or lifestyle. However, my mind was well made up ever since I had seen human pain and hardships during my grandmother’s recovery from illness at the hospital. This was further strengthened by the feeling of pain, sorrow, achievements and happiness I had experienced during my regular voluntary work at our family doctor’s clinic. To top it up I could not miss the sense of responsibility and achievement I had sensed with my brother. So for me there was no selection.
My mind was set from early age to pursue studies in medicine, and that is what I followed. Some other majors would have the studies completed much earlier, and I would immediately start working, which means quick and good return. Amongst all the majors, studies in medicine was the longest, including the coop work, and even after all that getting into the main stream of practice after a reasonable period of working as an apprentice or junior was much longer. However, I was longing for the satisfaction and confidence I was noticing with our family doctor, who was my chosen mentor, and my brother.
This was the confidence and satisfaction they gained by serving and saving the human lives. I wanted the same satisfaction and fulfillment for myself. So for me there was no choice. My first and final choice had to be the studies in medicine. On the other hand financial conditions in our family were also not very strong. My parents were already burdened with the cost of my brother’s studies. However, my family stood very well by my choice. They provided full support and encouragement. With all these consideration I stood by my first and last choice to join the medical school.
